Yesterday, I spent time in a first grade writing class. They were discussing revision strategies. Yes, at first grade. Revision is delightful, although it’s not always as elaborate as we might be thinking.
One student I conferred with was writing about football. He had written, “One afternoon, I played football.” I asked him what his purpose was for writing this piece. Jay said, “It was a great game. We won.” He had definite purpose.
We talked about how the action in the story could help share his purpose along with the illustration he had. I left and Jay busied himself with writing. When I checked back with him, he had written, “We played in the field. We won a trophy.” I then noticed a star between the last two sentences. I asked about the star. “I forgot to add in that he (pointing to his picture) threw the ball to me and I caught it.”
A large smile spread across his face. He was inspired and thrilled with his work. I was thrilled that my conferring had inspired him.
I love these moments! I am always surprised to see the effects a conversation between writers can have.
I am not a bit surprised that your writer made the changes. He has been empowered by his teachers. Well done!
What a sweet story!
The small things do mean a lot. Congratulations on a great conference.
I love the fact that he recognized how your conferring had edged him forward with his writing. What a fabulous moment for both of you!
Thanks for giving us a glimpse into a classroom. I’m glad you were able to spend a little time in writing workshop — I know you love those moments. 🙂
That’s great that he listened, revised, and was so pleased with his work. It must be a real thrill to work with those first graders and move them into new places with their writing. Sweet story.
Those are the moments that will remain with you both. I still remember a few teachers who encouraged me when I was young, & it’s always a kick to meet a former student who has fond memories of having been in my class.
Kathy Cannon Wiechman (Swagger Writers)
This is such a great story. So cool how teaching writing to kids can have lessons for us as well
I love hearing revision is happening in First Grade. I have been trying to talk to some second graders about it.
So inspiring! I love watching those little brains!!
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Revising in 1st grade, music to my ears. Awesome.